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WRITING TASK 2 You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: There is no doubt that globalisation has benefited the world by bringing together people, business and nations. People who criticise it stand in the way of progress. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words.

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It is generally believed that modernization of the world has given an opportunity to union nations in almost every aspect of our lives.
However
, some folk claim that
globalisation
 may cause issues in some societies. In my point of ,view
globalisation
 has united many human beings and
that is
 beneficial for me.
First
 of all,
globalisation
 has created possibilities for businesses to trade worldwide. Nowadays governments can grow their economy by exporting and
import
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importing
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 deals with
other region
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another region
other regions
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 from different parts of the globe and
this
 helps to improve
lifestyle
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the lifestyle
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 of the community.
For example
, developing countries can grow their economy rapidly by trading with already developed land.
Secondly
, people can have families and friends globally and explore new cultures and traditions.
On the other hand
, some individuals from
a certain types
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certain types
a certain type
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 of societies and cultures believe that traditions and
lifestyle
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lifestyles
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which
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apply
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left by their ancestors should not be forgotten and
be
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apply
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respected.
For instance
, in some part of the African ,countries there are a lot of ancient tribes who
is even nowadays lives
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is even nowadays living
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 like hundred years ago and they do not want changes,
same
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the same
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 we can say about
Australian
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the Australian
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aborigines
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aborigine's
aborigines'
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 nation. To put it all in the nutshell, in my ,opinion
globalisation
 without a doubt has more benefits than drawbacks.
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