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Some people think living in big cities is bad for people’s health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is always a debate that living in big
cities
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affects
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 the
health
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 of the citizens. I strongly agree with
this
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 statement, living in a small city is much better than living in a big city. The life of citizens in big
cities
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 becomes very hectic these days,
people
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 are running like horses for money and pleasure without knowing that they are losing a very important time and
health
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 of their own.
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, living in a small town is much simpler than a big city,
people
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 have limited resources but have the most valuable thing which is "time", they care about their
health
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 and work for reasonable hours. By having limited resources
people
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 don't have the problem of stress and anxiety which is very harmful to
health
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, research shows that in big
cities
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 the suicidal rate is increasing rapidly.
People
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 commit suicide due to the stress of work and competition in workplaces. Another thing
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 affecting the
health
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 of
people
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 in large
cities
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 is technology. Technology becomes an essential part of everyone's life but in big
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cities
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 it became a habit for everyone,
people
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 are wearing wireless earphones for almost 15 hours or even more and it causes lots of brain-related issues to them. Technology
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 becomes the reason
of
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 depression for young
people
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 in large
cities
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,
for instance
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, if we upload any pictures on Instagram or videos on Youtube and do not get the expected response
by
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 other
people
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, it may cause depression and may lead to serious
health
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 problems. To conclude, there is always a saying that money can't buy happiness and I will recommend to
people
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 to live more healthy and happy and don't run for more money because it may cause you some serious
health
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 problems.
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