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Some suggest that young people should take a job for a few years between school and university. Discuss what the advantages and disadvantages might be for people who do this.

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It is really popular that students choose to take a
job
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 for a few years after graduation from their school. While it is considered
that is
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 detrimental for them, I strongly argue against
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 statement. On the one hand, many
people
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 believed that taking a
job
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 as they are too young can be very dangerous. The main reason for
this
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 is that they don't have experience
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 the occupation. Maybe they make the wrong decision on choosing a
job
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, so it affects their future career.
For instance
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, young
people
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 choose the
job
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 for the reason their friends invite them to do and
then
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 the
job
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 is not suitable for them.
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,
people
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 might become fed up with it and fail in
life
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.
On the other hand
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,
people
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 need to try taking a
job
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 after graduation since they have to explore themselves. That way, they can have opportunities to know what they need in
life
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, what they want to do, you name it. Taking a
job
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 at a young age can supply them with many realistic experiences and learning skills that
university
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 does not teach.
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, you may suit the
job
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 without going to
university
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 ad become successful in your ways. By the way, your
life
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 is your choice you can do everything whatever you want. Providing that you feel the
job
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 does not fit you anymore, you can go to
university
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 and open a new page in your
life
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. In general, there are benefits and harm to choosing to take a
job
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 after school. I suppose that taking a
job
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 after school is beneficial since going to
university
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 is not the only way to success.
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