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Some people believe that rich countries should provide poor countries with help that is not financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #countries #aid
Nowadays, we live
on
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 the globalization era
which
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 it has been widely claimed that some individuals have the ideas that developed
countries
 should support nonfinancial
aids
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aid
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 to developing
nations
. From my point of view, I totally agree with the statement and my reasons will be discussed in detail.
To begin
 with, I strongly believe that one of the most effective ways that rich
countries
 should do is
providing
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 educational
supports
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 in many aspects
,
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 because
the
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education is
very
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 important and indispensable factor to develop the country.
For example
, in Thailand, we had
Japan-Thailand
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the Japan-Thailand
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 Economic Partnership Agreement which was a form of
free
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 trade agreement signed between the
countries
 of Thailand and Japan that representative of
Japanese
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the Japanese
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 government will provide updated information
in
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 agricultural technology to
Thai
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the Thai
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government’s representative
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.
Additionally
, I personally think that they should encourage more trade opportunities between two types of
nations
 because the poorer country can export their agricultural products to rich
nations
in
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 lower price tax .
According to the
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 economic news from
local
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 news channel, they told us about how benefits of trade opportunities to developing
nations
 because if they have a trading contact it will force them to develop more
about
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local facilities. To conclude, I personally agree with
this
 viewpoint since it seems to fix the problems at the root of the causes which are how to improve the standard of education and
to
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promote more international commerce. These
countries
 have the resources to improve the lives of the people from poor
nations
. The technical know-how from affluent
nations
 should be shared to impoverish
nations
 and not ignore the needs of disadvantaged populations.
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