Some people think that zoos are cruel and should be closed down. Others; however, believed that zoos can be useful in protecting wild animals. Discuss both views and give your opinion Write your response not less than 250 words. You get 40 minutes to complete this task
It is observed that at times many people believe that
zoos
must shut down because the animals
inside them are not treated with love, whereas
there are some who, in fact, think that menageries can be coined for proper
safety and security of the Correct article usage
the proper
animals
. In my opinion, I agree that zoological parks can prove to help caress the animals
and, therefore
, should be promoted and preserved.
On the one hand, there are folks who affirm to seize the zoos
because of the ill-treatments
the Correct your spelling
ill-treatment
animals
receive. Firstly
, they are captivated by their wild habitats by separating them from their family. This
makes the animals
sad indeed. Because they are used for a
display, the Correct article usage
apply
animals
are left with no or very little freedom for their movement. Hence
, those wild species become lethargic. Secondly
, they also
become a way of entertainment for the public. So, the trainers do
use harsh techniques to train the Verb problem
apply
animals
, leaving behind them to be injured. To add further
, it is a means of generating money though in an illegal way. For example
, many zoos
have tie-ups with circuses to showcase their educated animals
and thus
earn a side income.
On the other hand
, and I agree, the positive aspects of the zoological parks hold more value than its
daunting traits because of the personal attention, availability of veterinarians etc. One can argue the zoo being a cage, is not good, but at the same ,time it offers and attends to the health of an animal. Since an in-house veterinarian is available, the disease and Correct pronoun usage
their
an
illness can be cured quickly. Another positive note is the available option of Correct article usage
apply
an
"elective reproduction" amongst the same breed of Correct article usage
apply
animals
under supervised conditions. That helps in the conservation of an endangered species. For instance
, nowadays, many horses are being mated this
way to overcome the scarcity of horses which are dead due to
failure in derbies. Lastly
, the menageries do offer timely and nutritious food to animals
and therefore
they do not need to sleep on an empty stomach.
In conclusion, despite many people's insist that zoos
need to be abolished because of the authority's lack to provide proper care, in my ,opinion I agree that zoos
should be promoted as it
Correct pronoun usage
they
offers
benefits to wild creatures and the environment together.Correct subject-verb agreement
offer
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