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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #professionals #doctors #engineers #work #country
Some
professionals
 like doctors and engineers should be required either to
work
 in their training
country
 or in another
country
 as their wish. Both perspectives are not wrong as
it
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they
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 can
gives
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 some benefits and good impacts.
Thus
, I will give my opinion
to
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 those perspectives.
First
,
give
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giving
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 a
require
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requirement
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 to
professionals
 to
work
 in the
country
 where they did their training can be seen as their contribution to their
train’s
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training’s
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 place or institution.
Moreover
, they have
been
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experienced and known their surrounding really well during their training. So, I think it would help them to
work
 and adapt easily
with
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to
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 any circumstances or conditions.
Besides
,
give
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giving
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 them
a
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the
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 freedom to
work
 in another
country
 as what their wish is not a bad
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 too. In my view, as long as they can
work
 better in other countries and give their best
contribute
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 in another place,
then
that is
 fine. It is their right to
work
in
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anywhere.
Have
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Having
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 experience in different countries can
also
 help them to develop their carrier.
In addition
, a certain
place
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places
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 in some countries (e.g some rural areas) may need better changes but unfortunately they not be able to afford it since they don’t have any
professionals
 in their areas to lead them to
the
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better conditions. For
this
 reason,
professionals
 from other
country
are seem
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seem
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 likely to help them with the experiences and
knowledges
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knowledge
pieces of knowledge
bits of knowledge
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 that they have got from their previous training places. To sum up, either
work
 in the
country
 where they did their training or maybe
work
 in another
country
 as they want are definitely have good impacts depend on its visions. I would say there is nothing wrong with both views.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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