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Some people think that government should spend money on creating new public buildings such as museum, city halls, rather than renovating the existing ones. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the case of my country, I have seen
the
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 rise in demand for new public
places
 and
attractions
. While I agree that new
attractions
 and facilities should be provided, I do not fully agree that money should be spent on creating more
places
instead
 of renovating existing ones. Public
places
 are accessible to all
people
, as stated in the name.
Places
 like museums are spots for recreation. It is true that nobody wants to see the same thing numerous times. The fascination dies down, and
people
 become uninterested in them.
As a result
, there is always a demand for new content. In the case of public
places
 like city halls,
people
 go there for work. With time, the facilities provided need to be updated. A growing population
also
 results in denser crowds in public
places
,
thus
 causing numerous inconveniences and
makes
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 the time spent there an uncomfortable or irritating experience. Due to these reasons,
people
 are thinking that the government should invest in creating more public
places
. While creating new
places
 will indeed provide new
attractions
 and may solve problems, it is not an easy solution. Making more public
places
 will require huge spaces, whereas available space is decreasing day by day due to the increase of residential structures, especially in developing countries. In my opinion, renovating existing
places
 and adding new
attractions
, facilities and improved interior architecture is the better solution. To conclude, the government can indeed spend money on creating new public buildings, but I think it is inefficient and spending on renovations is the wiser decision.
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