Although it is generally illegal, physical punishment continues in many countries. Some argue that parents should have the right to punish their children in this way. Do you agree or disagree?

Many people argue that corporal
punishment
can be useful for our
children
.
Conversely
, others think
this
path is obsoleted by experts.
However
, personally
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I
completly dissagree
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completely disagree
with
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this
idea that physical
punishment
is necessary for our
children
. But I would argue, I am a bit out of depth here because
i
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am a single person.
First
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reason to disagree is that
,
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by
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method
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confidence is given
from
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our child.
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, they will not have
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role in society.
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, they would turn
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an introverted person and will not have enough suitable
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in their lives. For
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, if these persons
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not
control
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by parents and doctors, it
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is possible
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become
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criminals
.
Furthermore
, in the best situation, they will be given some
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like
as
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depression.
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second reason that I
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disagree
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with
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is that
,
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they should not be responsible
about
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for
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their responsibility. Physical
punishment
just
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our
children
to fighting
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their future but in
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the wrong
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way.
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right of others.
whereas
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other
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reach their aims
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. In conclusion,
due to
the reasons
mentained
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mentioned
above, I argue that we should have put
corponal
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corporal
punishment
away and alternative world-class methods to treat our
children
.
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