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Some people view teenage conflict with their parents as a neccessary part of growing up, whilst others see it as something negative. Discuss your both views and give your own opinion.

#people #conflict #parents #neccessary #part #whilst
Nowadays, most
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people
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the people
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 live in a modern world and they choose modern
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life-styles
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lifestyles
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. They spend lots of time with their cellphones or on the internet. These modern
people
 send emails or types letters
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 their computers
instead
 of
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it
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 down
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their own hand.
Therefore
, some
people
 suggest that
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handwriting is going to be extinct and no need to be taught in schools anymore. Please let me stand opposite side of
this
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Firstly
, writing by hand is one of the important steps of learning
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by
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children
.
Moreover
, scientists suggest that
children
 could learn better by connecting to the words with their minds and bodies,
for instance
: teaching
process
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 of apple.
Teacher
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The teacher
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 should ask
children
 to listen to
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 word apple, look at the picture of it and write it down on
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paper after that teacher could show the real apple to
children
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the children
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. Scientists mention that during
this
 process
children
 could sink their sensory inputs and understand how to write words.
Hence
, handwriting is an important necessary learning step.
Secondly
, having
a
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beautiful Handwriting is an artistic branch.
People
 dedicated their passion to their lovers by letter with outstanding handwriting about thirty years ago and we had had many poems about
this
 love expression. Now, maybe those attitudes are not very common but still working.
Hence
, sending a
massage
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 with
paper
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a paper
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 letter that contains your handwriting always has a different persisting meaning than
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type
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letters
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letter
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 or
emails
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email
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.
Moreover
, some psychologists believe that handwriting has some personal aspects
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writer
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 and could help
people
 to express their feeling to each other.
Therefore
, they suggest, it is better to write cards
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 special occasions
instead
 of typing
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 mailing.
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 conclusion, we should consider that
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handwriting is not useful
like
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 before and emails or typing on computers and using
cellphones
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cell phones
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 are more functional and faster, but I believe that we should not stop our
children
 from learning how to write a beautiful letter by their hands.
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