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In some countries, people encourage students to find part-time jobs while some people don't. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#countries #people #students #jobs
In the contemporary epoch,there is irrefutable debate among folks about
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part time
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job
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 for graduates.
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 countries,
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individuals
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 inspire learners to find part-time employment while
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others
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 do not advocate for it. I firmly coincide with and withstand the stated notion that it will expose the student in the line of
employment
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 environment.
This
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Firstly
,
this
 kind of exposure is very
advantegious
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advantageous
 to the young stars
although
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society is not really for it.They end up practising what they are taught in lecture rooms as a
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the
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experience
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particularly
particulary
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particularly
 in their area of interest.
Moreover
,work
experience
 can help them land their dream
job
 because most recruiters prefer to employ individuals with some
experience
.
For example
,
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 research done by kepsa(2020) depicts that 90% of employer prefer to give
job
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the job
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 to people who have gone for
internship
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an internship
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 which help them as they do not take long to adapt to the system.
Consequently
,it is
imperrative
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imperative
 for
school going
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 people to undertake part-time attachment.
On the other hand
,
this
 can be detrimental since it can bring some disruption in the study
although
 the student understands and retain more when they practice what they are taught in
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.
Furthermore
 ,the
scolar
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scholar
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 is not in a position to prepare for exams or even attend group discussion with others as there
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 duties allocated
for
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 them by
employer
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.
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,
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university
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 of Nairobi depicts that
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part time
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 jobs for
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 make them drop out of school.
Therefore
,
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 individual
do
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 not advise pupils to work as it
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 their
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performance
perfomance
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performance
 as well as some end up dropping out of
academy
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i
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 would like to restate
my
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 perspective that
i
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 concur that undergraduates must take part-time jobs to gain relevant
experience
 for the sake of future dream
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 despite others advocating that it will affect the graduate end results.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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