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Some people believe that social media sites, such as Facebook or Twitter, have a negative impact on young people and their ability to form personal relationships.

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Nowadays society uses social
media
 a lot and it has changed
people
’s behaviour. Some public believe that social
media
 sites,
such
 as Facebook or Twitter, have a negative impact on the young crowd and their ability to form personal relationships. In
this
 essay, I will talk about these two points of view and at the end I will give my opinion on them.
First
 of all,
people
 waste their
time
 surfing on social
media
 sites like Facebook or Twitter. If
people
 waste their
time
 looking at someone else profile, they would miss their own life.
For example
, teenagers spend around 4 to 6 hours on the computer looking at other
people
’s Facebook profiles while their own lives pass by.
In addition
,
people
 have lost the skill to interact in person. Young adults, who waste
time
 on the computer, do not do any activity outdoors with other
people
.
For instance
, when they are in front of other
people
, they are shy and avoid any contact in person.
Finally
, while social
media
 can be useful for some
people
 it
also
 can ruin
people
's lives. In my opinion,
people
 should spend less
time
 on social
media
 and interact more face to face with other
people
 to have self-development
instead
 of looking at someone else life online.
Submitted by Andrea Barreto on

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