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Some people believe that social media sites, such as Facebook or Twitter, have a negative impact on young people and their ability to form personal relationships.

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Nowadays society uses social
media
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 a lot and it has changed
people
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’s behaviour. Some public believe that social
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 sites,
such
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 as Facebook or Twitter, have a negative impact on the young crowd and their ability to form personal relationships. In
this
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 essay, I will talk about these two points of view and at the end I will give my opinion on them.
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 of all,
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 waste their
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 surfing on social
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 sites like Facebook or Twitter. If
people
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 waste their
time
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 looking at someone else profile, they would miss their own life.
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, teenagers spend around 4 to 6 hours on the computer looking at other
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’s Facebook profiles while their own lives pass by.
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,
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 have lost the skill to interact in person. Young adults, who waste
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 on the computer, do not do any activity outdoors with other
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.
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, when they are in front of other
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, they are shy and avoid any contact in person.
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, while social
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 can be useful for some
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 it
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 can ruin
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's lives. In my opinion,
people
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 should spend less
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 on social
media
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 and interact more face to face with other
people
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 to have self-development
instead
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 of looking at someone else life online.
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