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Many people believe that it is good idea to have dress code at work place. do you agree ?

#people #idea #dress #code #work #place
Many professions around the world have different types of
dress
 codes. It communicates
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relevant
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 institute's or company's identity. Most
of
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people think, that wearing
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,
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dress
 cord is far better, than wearing casual dressing. I completely agree with
this
 statement, as
this
 idea conveys
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 benefits for the employees.
Firstly
, when performing activities in the working environment, there must be a comfortable background not only with equipment, techniques or Co-Workers but
also
 with the clothing attires. Each and every person has different types of desires regarding what they wear. ,
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 some fashions might be interrupted for the work they perform. ,
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 each and every institute's main aim is to improve effectiveness and reach
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development. So
As a result
dress
 code has become an important concept at present.
For instance
 profession of nursing can be mentioned. As nurses are having long and heavy working shifts,they cannot wear stylish and uncomfortable dresses.
Therefore
, a uniform has been designed to ease their work and to perform better patient care.
Additionally
, it is much cheaper to wear Certain costumes rather than donning fashionable garments, because these days clothes are much higher in price. ,
Also
this
 idea is advantageous to identify workers outside of their company and
that is
 another way of advertising, as the company's logo and name are printed on them. Overall, there are a lot of advantages of offering a
dress
 code to the workers. In my opinion, the government can publish a rule to establish
this
 notion, as it can improve the productivity of the public sector especially.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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