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Although more and more people read the news on the Internet, newspapers will remain the most important source of news for the majority of people. Do you agree or dissagree?

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Technology plays a vital role in our life. Even though a lot of people are adhered to
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news papers
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 but in the upcoming time everything will be digitalised.
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society
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 less time to do so and
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 sector. A vast number of them
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precise headlines are available. Papers are the
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 of trees. On a daily
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 a lot of them are being cut to form them.
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 found that
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nature. It can be concluded that due to
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 schedule of an individual they are more likely to go through the piece of information while commuting to their destination via mobile phones and
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 not concur
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. It is
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