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The Internet will bring a new freedom of information and thus narrows the gap between developed and developing countries. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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Nowadays, it is thought that the network of
information
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 will be liberated by means of the
internet
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 and
therefore
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, the
gap
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of
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technology between developed and undeveloped nations will come to be diminished. From my point of view, I would argue that
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 cannot afford to refill the
gap
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 and the relevant reasons why it cannot will be clarified in
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 essay. As far as the
information
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 is concerned, developed
countries
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 dominate most of the
area
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 of the
internet
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.
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, as they have the ability to manipulate the
information
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, they will not be sharing the details as long as there is
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not
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profit
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 for them.
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,
countries
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 that are still developing will not have the access to
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detailed facts until they propose special offers to the original nation.
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, far from refilling the
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, only summarized news can rarely be gained via the
internet
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. Another striking reason is
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 with country's budget. Assume a case where
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meticulous
information
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 is revealed. In that situation,
although
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countries
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 can reach
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the facts, they
will not be able to do nothing
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 apart from watching still.
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 is because, as the name suggested, developing
countries
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 do not have enough income to implement
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 costly projects.
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, the
gap
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 still
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remained unchanged in spite of the unconcealed secrets related to technology. In conclusion, it can be vividly seen that the
internet
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 cannot minimize the technology
gap
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 between nations around the globe mainly because of self-interested
countries
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 and the financial problem that developing
countries
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 are facing with. Due to these matters. I undoubtedly believe that
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 issue cannot be handled only by the mere
internet
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.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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