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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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continued
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continue
 to evolve and our living supplies are getting better.
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,
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 these developments, a handful of
people
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still a number of them
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 hungry.
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this
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solutions
soultions
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solutions
could
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be make
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.
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of
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the
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countries
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 do not have
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sufficient
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sufficient
land
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 to grow
crops
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. A large
amount
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 of
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lands
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land
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 are required to grow
tones
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tons
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 of
crops
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 and supply
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 the citizens. If small
countries
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does
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 not have enough
crops
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 to reach the amount needed for
people
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, the cost of the items will grow and those unfortunate
people
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 have difficulty to
affrod
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afford
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, those poor
countries
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 do not have
money
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 to buy the techniques to harvest the
crops
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. Some of the
crops
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 are to be grown in
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particular
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 environment,
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, poor
countries
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 do not have enough funds to buy the seeds or
contruct
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construct
contract
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facilities
facilites
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facilities
 for plantation.
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, glasshouses
are build
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 in many
area
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 in order to consume
the
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particular plants at
anytime
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.
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 a number of
countries
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 have
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sufficient
sufficent
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sufficient
lands
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, governments are not able to provide the facilities for the
plantion
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plantation
plant
 due to high cost.
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, worldwide
people
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 are still facing hunger due to
lack
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 of
land
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 and funds. There are possible ways to solve
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 of
problem
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. One of the
soultions
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solutions
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 developed
countries
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 support the other
countries
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 by giving
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them
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finance
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 help. By donating the
money
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 to the
undelveloped
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undeveloped
countries
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, they can use the affairs to buy the techniques for improving
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agriculture
argriculture
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agriculture
.
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, there are events run by
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the government
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 or charities to support
the
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needy
people
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in
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worldwide so anyone can donate
money
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 to
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develop
develope
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develop
 their living environments.
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, those who are rich in
land
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 properties,
they
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can share the
land
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to
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 the
needies
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needy
neediest
. There must be leftover
lands
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 and these could be provided to
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the needy
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 by renting the
lands
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.
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 could benefit both
countries
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 because rich
countries
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 can increase their profits while the other could harvest or purchase the
crops
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with
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 cheaper prices.
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, donating
money
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 and sharing the leftover
lands
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 gives
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advantages
advanatages
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advantages
 to unfortunate
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countries
countires
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countries
 and get out of hunger. In conclusion, it is
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 fact that improved agriculture is not available
to
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worldwide,
however
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,
the
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people
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 could
rid
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out
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of hunger if they have enough
supports
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 from others.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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