Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Certain individuals believe that movies can be watched through
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devices than going to a theatre while some
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that to get the exact feeling, we need to go to a film hall. In my opinion, it needs to be viewed by going to a theatre.
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discuss how time can be saved by working through mobiles and
secondly
, it will explain the enthusiasm which can be gained when it is experienced at a cinema.
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people are
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than
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before and watching a movie via a
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device is a
time saving
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activity with pleasure.
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people are engaged in many work every minute, they can watch a film using a phone while they are engaging
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task.
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, I used to watch teledramas which
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missed
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day when I was travelling after work.
On the other hand
, many individuals expect to enjoy movies at film halls since it is a change
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life style
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.
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, the time is limited,
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visits
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to get that atmosphere with sounds and effects which gives liveliness
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scenes.
In addition
to that, it is a great opportunity to catch up with friends to mitigate stress which builds up in daily activities.
For instance
, our office colleagues are gathering every month for a theatre to refresh our minds. In conclusion, it is true that people are having
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congested
life with their employment but it should not be a barrier to enjoy ourselves by engaging in activities
such
as watching movies which fade away our daily struggles.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Convenience
  • Mobile Viewing
  • Cost-efficient
  • Time-efficient
  • Personalized experience
  • Immersive
  • Cinematic experience
  • Surround sound
  • Collective experience
  • Technical superiority
  • Sensory experience
  • Social hubs
  • Cultural events
  • Distractions
  • Preservation
  • Filmmaking art
  • Cinematographic nuances
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