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Discipling a child is the responsibility either father or teachers.Do you agree or disagree?

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Our society has been debating for decades who is responsible for disciplining our
children
:
parents
,
teachers
, or both. While many
parents
 believe that
this
 task is their role and professors have no place in it, others disagree. Those who believe that
teachers
 should be involved in
children
's discipline point out some arguments. The obvious one is that
teachers
 are well trained and educated
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 coaching their pupils since
this
 is their profession and speciality. Usually, they take several pedagogical courses which might help them to better deal with situations that require some disciplinary action.
Furthermore
,
school
 is one of the places where
children
 interact with their peers and the community.
Therefore
, it is expected that they perform some wrong attitudes that require immediate action by
teachers
.
For example
, if a student bullies a colleague,
teachers
 must act right away and explain that
this
 behaviour is unacceptable.
Although
 I agree that the above arguments are valid, I think that the main role of disciplining a child belongs to the
parents
. Families and schools have different and complementary duties in
children
’s education.
School
 is the place for curricular knowledge, family is the place for care and non-curricular learning within a private environment.
Moreover
,
parents
 are the
first
 person in a child's life, thereby they are tasked to
initially
 train them to have proper manners while growing up. Mothers and fathers should equip their kids with adequate attitudes from an early age, before their
first
 exposure to
school
 and
teachers
. In a nutshell, while
teachers
 have some role in their pupils' education, I believe that
parents
 have a bigger responsibility in disciplining their own
children
. Not only, are they legally responsible for their
children
 but
also
 soft skills and proper manners can be passed at home even before they attend
school
.
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