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Famous people sometimes give their opinions on public topics. Is this a good thing? To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Undoubtedly,it is true fact that in
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 era famous masses sometimes give their ideas on public topics.
i
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 think
this
 is a good thing. I agree with
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some large extent.and I will discuss the reasons in
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 paragraphs. To commence with,
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 are a host of reasons which back support my statement.
First
 and foremost is they have well experienced.To explain it,
some times
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sometimes
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 on public topics many uneducated individuals give their options they don't know anything about on matter.So when any famous and educated individual
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own
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their own
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 opinion so individuals easily accept
this
 because
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they
thay
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they
kwno
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know
 very well about the famous individual and they thought he is very experienced so he know very well than others
For example
,in 2009 a public matter was started among the
peoples
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 about
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the water supply. And they
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started
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 together.but when
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Akshay Kumar give their idea all the masses Were very
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 and they realised their mistake.
Hence
,many times position is very bad and out of control so that time
these famous entity
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this famous entity
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 tackle the position easily and they ameliorate the
situation
 with your ideas.
On the other hand
,in some situations famous individual make the dispute is extremely.to explicate it, something
situation
 is not large but the famous individual involve in
this
situation
 and they want to solve the
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hurdle
hurdles
 according to own ideas.and they make the
situation
wersing
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wearing
.
for example
,in 2020 in the period of COVID-19 human being want to tackle the problem
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 to easily way but the many famous masses give their option on the problem and they want to solve become own way. To conclude,
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 matter is very
comman
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common
 in
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every
 area.sometimes it
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 easily and something it
make
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 larger controversy.so to
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solve
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slove
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 the concern famous individual play
vital
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 role. According to
me
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this
 is good for
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