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Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child's development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion.

#people #children #home #child #development #school #methods
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it is considered that parents have preferences for
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children
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 education
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 as learning at home or going to
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. The homeschooling program could be
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 effective alternative for
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 who have
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special needs.
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, some argue that studying with friends at
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 might assist social, emotional and
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intelligence
intellegence
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intelligence
students
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. I do believe
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 schooling in the public or private
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 directly is significantly beneficial. Regarding some conditions,
family
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families
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 prefer to protect their
children
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 from external influences, including at
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.
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 could be reasonable for parents if their
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 have difficulties
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learning with others. It means that
children
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 require special treatments during learning,
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,
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children
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, the teachers should offer specific methods for them to prevent stress and
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 for them.
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,
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children
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developments
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 might
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 by their condition, which could be decided by their nuclear family. On the other side, generally learning face-to-face at
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 is beneficial mentally and socially for
students
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. The teachers have
a huge methods
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 to encourage their
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 by separating
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 groups, discussions, and lecturings. By following those activities,
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 might find
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solution
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in
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 each problem, collaborate with their peers and learn to be listeners.
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, indirectly, they basically build their mental and perform
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themselves
theirselves
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. In conclusion, teaching at home is
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 method for
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 who need
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special
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approaches
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approach
 and may be more comfortable for them than learning at
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.
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, if
children
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 have wide space to attempt many learning methods at
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 with their partners, once I reaffirm it is the strengths of gaining education formally.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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  • peer pressure
  • flexibility
  • instill values
  • socialization
  • communication skills
  • specialized facilities
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  • structured environment
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  • well-rounded education
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