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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing.

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Nowadays, the world has been changed from the past,
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 as the telephone replace the pigeon for sending messages. So, it is impossible that people will live without changes. While in the future, we might face a lot of challenges and decisions. In my opinion, I prefer to face numerous challenges
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 of having a trivial routine every day.
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, some of the public will choose to stay in
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 comfort zone without any pressure or changes.
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, having the same profession, or working
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 the same company for an undetermined period
cause
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 them
lack
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of
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adventurous
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, workers should know what kind of emotion to expect from their job so that they might feel boring easily or sick of the daily routine during their job. On the others hand, there are others who recommend that changes are beneficial. Some
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people would like to change their job frequently. These switches lead them to try different areas of interest,
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, they might find what they really enjoy doing. In conclusion, I believe challenges might lead us to improve our
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,
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 as learn how to cope with several unexpected situations.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • status quo
  • stagnation
  • routine
  • comfort zone
  • predictability
  • specialization
  • innate
  • personal growth
  • adaptability
  • fast-paced
  • new horizons
  • equilibrium
  • progress
  • dynamic
  • transformation
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