IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5.5

An increasing number of professionals such as teachers and doctors are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developing countries. What are the reasons for this trend?

In many poor
countries
Use synonyms
, it is known that the large number of
people
Use synonyms
 who have
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
specific occupation disappeared from there. Specific jobs generally include doctors, teachers or nurses. In
this
Linking Words
 essay, I am going to discuss the reason why these
people
Use synonyms
 have left
from
Change preposition
apply
show examples
where they grew up.
To begin
Linking Words
 with, there are various push factors that many professionals abandon. The most compelling cause for
this
Linking Words
 circumstance is because they have plenty of expenses to spend their life in richer places. In general, the ordinary citizens grown in developing
countries
Use synonyms
 have fewer earnings compared with
them
Correct pronoun usage
those
show examples
 in developed
countries
Use synonyms
.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, some
people
Use synonyms
 doing extraordinary jobs which are able to obtain higher salaries, are extremely affordable in order to buy the commodities in the nearest supermarket or high-order goods
such
Linking Words
 as
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
 cars or watches.
This
Linking Words
 means that
people
Use synonyms
 possibly migrate into
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
richer areas readily.
In addition
Linking Words
, political and environmental impacts on individuals
sparks
Change the verb form
spark
show examples
off
Change preposition
apply
show examples
these
people
Use synonyms
 to exit
from
Change preposition
apply
show examples
their
countries
Use synonyms
 immediately. Political effects related to the crime rates or the frequency of the conflicts in certain areas, and in poorer places, there are higher tendencies to encounter these issues.
For instance
Linking Words
, over 50 thousand
people
Use synonyms
 have died
as a result
Linking Words
 of the weapons being used by the terrorists. In the case of the environment in non-flourished towns, public areas especially washrooms and landfills are apt to have relatively dirty sanitation.
This
Linking Words
 has the risk of leading to serious diseases like diarrhoea. At
last
Linking Words
, the nations with great economies are extremely international compared with others.
For example
Linking Words
, there are large varieties of individuals with different kinds of cultures.
This
Linking Words
 contributes to the experts
to come
Change the verb form
coming
show examples
 in touch with their unique thoughts or way to live. It can not be experienced in
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
small cities as there are fewer attractive
pull-factors
Correct your spelling
pull factors
show examples
 to welcome the travellers or residents. In conclusion, several causes can be seen to lead teachers or doctors to exit from their own sites. Given
this
Linking Words
 situation, it is recommended that governments with lower GDP must focus on improving these drawbacks which I
provide
Change the form of the verb
provided
show examples
 above.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »- a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: