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Some people believe that the best way of learning about life is by listening to the advice of family and friends. Others believe that the best way of learning is through personal experience. what is the best way in your opinion?

In
this
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 modern era, many
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 think that family and friends are the best options to take advice and other
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 think that
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 should learn from their past experiences. I personally believe that
parents
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 are the best advisor.
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 are the
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 teachers of young ones. They never give false hope or suggestion to their children. I personally believe that
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parents
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 are more experienced and they have faced multiple situations in their entire life which make them experienced.
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,
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 year I was not able to make my decision regarding my studies. I was confused about the stream which should I choose for my career. In ,
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 my father helped me and he said
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 look what is more demanding in
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 era and
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 I choose computer science.
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, best friends are
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 equally important to make
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 they help us in every situation and guide us about what is wrong and right.
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, others believe that a person should make his own
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.
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 built up their confidence. They learn many things from their faults. Teenagers become mature with their own
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.
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, a survey conducted by Harvard University found that
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 who take their own
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 are more confident and easily interact with
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.
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, they become more socialised. To conclude, in my opinion, I agree that
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 with their own
decisions
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 have benefits but I think that young ones who take the help of their
parents
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 are more successful in their life.

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