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Culture is turning similar around the world. What are the reasons? Is it a positive trend or a negative trend?

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Nowadays, studying abroad becomes popular for science, mathematics, social humanities, and all
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 in general. It has been a widespread argument that
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 trend brings positive and negative impacts. In
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 I will try to identify the advantages and disadvantages of
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 topic and state my preference. On the one hand, the advantages relate to
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networking and self-development as they deal with various people in the borderless era. They may expand
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 networks by knowing people from diverse
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, international
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 can share their experiences and get along with many friends to build start-up ideas overseas.
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, if
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 are used to
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 other cultural
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, it will broaden their perspectives.
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, they can take best practices from the visited countries to be applied to their country.
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, some destructive impacts that may come
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 trend are the high living cost and a burden for
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international
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. As we know that the capita revenue of one and other countries are different.
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,
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 may survive to live in Indonesia for only $300 per month, but it might be higher in America.
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, it is possible for the scholars to get stressed since they should be adaptive
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 many obstacles
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 as language, weather, and food consumption. As a consequence, if they want to blend and actively participate
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 the community activities, they will spend
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. To conclude, studying abroad offers many benefits to
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 as expanding networks and self
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,
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 should consider the drawbacks
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 regarding living allowance. Even so, I believe that I will take
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 abroad as my choice since the
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 outweigh the negative.
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