Some people say the main way to be happy in life is to have a lot of money. How might having a lot of money make people happy? What other things in life can make people happy?

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In the world, there are

things

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we can buy

paying

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by paying

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money

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But, at the same

time

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,time

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there are

things

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that we'll never be able to get

thought

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though

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we are

milianair

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millionaire

. We can make ourselves

spending

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spend

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money

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to buy visible items,

such

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as expensive cars, bags, houses, clothes and so on. A friend of mine, when she is

stressful

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stressed

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she

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likes

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to go shopping to get rid of the stress. Luckily she is rich so she is satisfied and happy after purchasing as many

things

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as possible.

Also

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money

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can be very important for some

things

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which are not visible.

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, if any of

family

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the family

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members is

illed

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killed

filled

requiring surgery

money

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becomes the most important factor to decide to proceed with the surgery or just suffer without having the surgery. We can not only make ourselves happy when we have lots of

money

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but,

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we can

also

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be happy with some

things

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that we never buy with

money

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. My parents were not rich when I was a child. I desired to get toys and pretty

clethings

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clothing

clothings

but the couldn't afford to buy them. I was disappointed that I could not have those

things

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while my friends were having. But my parents brought me up with unlimited love and they became my best friend to

listen

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listening

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to me when I was in

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trouble

truble

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trouble

and needed

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advice

advise

adviie

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advice

As a

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result

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,result

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my childhood was happy and I grew up having

positive

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a positive

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way of thinking

instead

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of complaining

for

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about

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the

things

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my parents couldn't buy for me. In conclusion through my experience, we can make our lives convenient when having enough

money

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. But, we do not need to be frustrated or desperate

with

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about

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not having lots of

money

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. Happiness depends on our

mind set

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mindset

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and it is always subjective to change if the amount of

money

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is considered a lot or little. By focusing on what we have on our hands now and

drive

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driving

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to achieve what we want to gain, we can always be happy.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

331 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Financial security
Basic needs
Comfort
Luxury
Freedom
Altruistic
Philanthropy
Nurturing relationships
Fulfillment
Sense of accomplishment
Physical well-being
Spiritual beliefs
Community involvement
Gratitude
Mindfulness
Simple pleasures

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