You have recently started work in a new company. Write a letter to an English- speaking friend. In your letter - explain why you changed jobs - describe your new job - tell him your ither news

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Dear Johnson, Hello! I hope you and your family members are well during

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pendamic

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pandemic

. I am writing

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letter to share

new

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good news that recently

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changed my job and join in

new

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the new

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company

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As you know that

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always worked

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the night shift in my old

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and it's always too much work

lod

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load

there.

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, it's not given enough salary so I can not

affordable

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. Sometimes it's given extra work any time so can not

managed

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all task so it's cut my wage . I explain about my new job ,

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company

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name is "Sobhana industry" and

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have

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good

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reputation. It's very close

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new apartment so I can easily go

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there. It's given

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the change

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chance

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change

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chance

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to go

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abroad and work with international Clint .

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company

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gives

big

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wage package .

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month they will

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new projects that

willing

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success

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project so they

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promotion

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high position. I am very excited to you come here and

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some time with me. I

hope

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meet see you soon. Warm wishes, Neha

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

185 words

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You have recently started work in a new company. Write a letter to an English- speaking friend. In your letter - explain why you changed jobs - describe your new job - tell him your ither news

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

online shopping has various advantages for consumers but may also have disadvantages, such as the loss of some individual privacy. do the advantages of online shopping for the consumers outweight the disadvantages ?

International tourism has brought about enormous benefit to many places .At the same time there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and environment . do disadvantage is outweight than advantages ?