Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
While some
people
believe that they are able to see films with electronic gadgets without going to the cinema
, others take the view
that people
should see it in a cinema
in order to get full enjoyment. In my opinion, I accept that watching movies
on phones or tablets make
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makes
people
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people's
enjoyment
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enjoyable
and
more convenient for them.
On the one hand, there are Correct word choice
apply
people
who take the view
that watching films in the movie theatre can give fully satisfied. The most convincing reason for believing this
is that the sound system and big screen in the cinema
give the viewers to get full pleasure. A particularly good example here is that a good audio system with an enormous screen lighted by a projector and the decoration of the theatre allowed the audience to be comfortable and relaxed. In addition
, it is a good way to get a great relationship or communication among friends or colleagues by going to the cinema
along with them.
Despite the above arguments, I am of the view
that we can easily watch all movies
that we want by using our gadgets without stepping out of the home. The main reason for holding this
is that the latest films can be watched with the help of advanced technology. For instance
, nowadays, there are many kinds of video streaming services and all updated movies
can be watched on those services with
an affordable price. A Change preposition
at
further
reason I hold to this
view
is that,
the audience can see Remove the comma
apply
movies
at any time. One good illustration of this
is that they can not only download the videos but also
watched them online at any time when they are free for busy people
. Unlikely, people
are unable to get those kinds of chances if they watch movies
in the cinema
.
To sum up, although
both arguments have their own merits, I believe that people
can get happiness by watching videos on electronic devices as they can catch an updated film at a low price and watch it many times at any timeSubmitted by sandarmyint740 on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite