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Band 6.5

Write a letter to your new employer. In your letter • explain your situation • describe your problems • tell him/her when you think you can start.

Dear Sir or Madam, I'm writing to express some concerns I faced before starting my new profession. I work as a web developer in the ESU Department of XXX Company, and I have been working there for about six years. Recently, I have received a job offer from your company , and I want to join, but currently I have a job to finish and a personal matter to sort
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Firstly
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, I have to send a notice letter to my current job, and some documents need to be sorted.
Secondly
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, I have to relocate to a new house
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accordingly
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accordingly,
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 I have to transfer my kids to a new school. These arrangements may require at least a month from now. I think I can start work next July. I would be ready to work online if needed. I would be grateful if you could consider my concerns. Thank you for your understanding. I look forward to your prompt response. Yours faithfully, Lamis A

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content
Explain more clearly the next steps and give a definite start date or plan when you can start.
structure
Put each idea in its own paragraph so the letter is easy to read.
grammar
Use simple words and check for small grammar mistakes in your text.
tone
Formal tone fits a job letter.
content
Start date is stated.
content
You list reasons for the delay.
Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • start
  • date
  • situation
  • explain
  • problem
  • reason
  • current job
  • notice
  • period
  • move
  • documents
  • visa
  • health
  • family
  • delay
  • start date
  • soon
  • able
  • can
  • will
  • could
  • offer
  • flexible
  • plan
  • remote
  • part-time
  • full-time
  • handover
  • understanding
  • thanks
  • regards
  • sincerely
  • contact
  • discuss
  • next steps
  • begin
  • work
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