many people get little or no exercise either during the working day or i their free time and have health problems as a result. why do many working people not get enough exercise? what can be done about this problem?
Many
individuals
do not exercise
enough, so they deal with different diseases. This
essay aims to examine the causes of immobility
and suggest how to face them.
Three reasons can explain the reason for lack of movement, which is followed by illness. Nowadays, in most works no need for physical activity. Due to massive progression in any field of science, the worker only sit on cheers and via a click on their computer can do any tasks, so they do not have any action or practice by the body to job done. Secondly
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Correct article usage
a lack
of
enough money and Remove the preposition
apply
time
force people
to vast their time
to achieve more money. Because of the severe need for more income, people
are forced to do more work and have different jobs to satisfy their needs, so they do not have time
and money to exercise
. In addition
, the volume of people
's knowledge about the consequences of immobility
leads them to not exercise
even in their free time
; due to not having enough reading or beneficence programs, people
do not know about exercise
and its benefits.
To resolve the issue, the government
should make a rule to force all employees and staff to exercise
. By this
rule the average time
of staff which do physical exercise
significantly increased. Government
should allocate enough time
to the work of all working persons to do some light practice in working places, and consider a charge for people
not to do that. Additionally
, the government
should improve people
's financial situation, so people
have more free time
by less working, and can allocate a part of their time
to do different sports activities. Government
can, in different ways create appropriate job opportunities for individuals
to solve people
's financial concerns. Moreover
, informing and making people
aware, can lead people
to do physical activities. If people
know about the benefits of exercise
may stay away from immobility
. If they know they can be deterred from most health problems and due to exercise
they can be healthy they do more sports.
In conclusion, immobility
is caused by the advancement of science, financial problems, and lack of enough awareness, which makes individuals
not exercise
in their free time
. To increase the amount of exercise
in society, the government
should make rules to force people
to do physical activity in their workplaces, improve the general condition of people’s
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people
financial
, and make Replace the word
finances
individuals
aware of the benefits of sport.Submitted by moradkhanighane on
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