NOWADAYS ROBOTS DO MORE AND MORE JOBS INSTEAD OF HUMANS. DOES THIS DEVELOPMENT HAVE MORE ADVANTAGES OR DISADVANTAGES?

As new technologies continue to emerge, more and more organizations are beginning to adopt
it
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and make changes to the way they run. One of these changes is the replacement of
humans
by
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robots
in jobs that were formally executed by
humans
. While
this
may be seen as an advancement of some sort, I seriously stand against it as I believe that the risks and disadvantages associated with it outweighs the benefits.
Firstly
, I do not think that
robots
can completely take the place of a human
being
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, because, in the
first
place, these
robots
need a human person to check and maintain them for
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to run smoothly. The cost of doing
this
is very high and not all companies can afford
this
. Even those who can afford it cannot continue to keep up with
such
expenditure. Unlike
humans
who are rational and can adapt to changing situations and
also
react to them
accordingly
,
robots
are programmed to follow a set of instructions and a change in situation and prompts can lead to a technical malfunction which defeats the purpose for which these
robots
were installed.
Secondly
, the replacement of
humans
by
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robots
will leave a lot of
persons
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jobless and poor. The consequence of
this
is that many families will be forced to deal with poverty and the rate of crime will in turn go up. If the people are jobless, there will be
loss
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in tax and the government will
also
be affected, ultimately the economy will suffer. No
doubts
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, there are a few advantages that
comes
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with the adoption and application of technology,
nonetheless
, from the arguments in
this
essay, one can see that the disadvantages associated with
this
change are way too
much
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.
Robots
can and should only be applied as a supporting role to make work easier for
humans
but definitely not as a replacement.
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