1. As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

businesses have social responsibilities all over the world,
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their responsibility in all aspects. Marketing scientists believe that for
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to be successful must have close consideration of social responsibilities. for ,instance big companies like Walmart have a donation section and for all purchasing during the payment program ask you about donations and encourage people to support others. On the other ,hand they hire everybody in their company even those
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with low capability or
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they hire someone in order to say well come to the Walmart shop. many other kinds of tasks are to have mind about the earth and our living environment that managers and businessmen must consider too.
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companies understand that if they want to have better achievements in their brands and production they have to show the real support of society and the environment.
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the oil company has different kinds of gas in the gas station and encourages the consumer to purchase the green fuel. by the
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way growing in work without attention to everyone's benefit is impossible at the moment. In ,conclusion if we want scientifically pay attention to earn money and grow in our
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we have particular attention to our responsibility and have some profit for the people and take care of the earth and all the creatures that live on it. so as I read about the marketing affairs and know a little beat about the
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. Participating with global benefit could have the best choice for all companies and organisations to be successful.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social responsibilities
  • Corporate social responsibility
  • Ethical behavior
  • Societal impact
  • Stakeholders
  • Profit-driven
  • Public perception
  • Environmental sustainability
  • Community development
  • Human rights
  • Workplace safety
  • Altruism
  • Balanced approach
  • Accountability
  • Consumer loyalty
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