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There are those who feel that modern technology has had an overall positive impact on lives, but others feel its existence has been more of a negative influence. Discuss both sides essay and give your own opinion

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With the influence of technology in our daily lives and the level of our dependency on modern devices, it is difficult to escape technology today. While some people think that its existence has no positive impact on the users, I agree with those who believe that it has some valuable impact on our lives. In conclusion,
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 some people may believe that it can affect
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our physical strengths as modern
machineries
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 doing all human tasks these days, it has led to finish our jobs in a little span of time.
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, on balance, I believe that modern technology has
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 impact on our lives.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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