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Write about the following topic: Some people choose to eat no meat or fish. They believe that this is not only better for their own health but also benefits the world as a whole. Discuss this view and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#topic #people #meat #fish #health #world
Dear Ram, I hope
this
 letter finds you in the pink of health.I'm happy to disclose my higher studies plan to you.I have opted for a course at Kings institute which is located in
Canada
. As you are aware ,I completed my Bachelor of computer science in Chennai
last
 year.I applied for a post-graduate networking course.
This
 is a 2 years diploma program which comes with a management subject. I have received 70% of my education loans from banks.And my father spent the remaining 30% of the amount on a jewel loan.So I am planning to do some part-time job where I could earn money to pay for my household and rent.It will help my family to reduce the debt from their side. I am not familiar with the place and working culture of
Canada
. As you already settled in
Canada
,you have optimal exposure to the Canadian job market.It is really helpful if you refer my profile to any suitable job in your organization. See you soon in
Canada
! lots of love, Sundar.
Submitted by sundararaja88 on

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