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The rise of convenice foods has helped people keep up with the speed of modern lifestyle. What are the advantages of this trend? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Today's era is a modern era,
therefore
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, it is believed that increasing the fast
food
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 outlets is helping people to adopt a modern lifestyle. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I will discuss both advantages and disadvantages of
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 trend and give my suggestions at the end of the passage . On the one hand, there are many benefits of
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 trend.
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 of all, it saves time for people.
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 as, they can order on skip and doordash online, with the help of their phone.
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, they can get their
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 in less than one hour without
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wasting time cooking.
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 time can be used for other purposes like studying, enjoying with family members and so on.
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, there are different types of
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 available in the market. So, they do not bore to eat regularly
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food
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.
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, they can make
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 according to their just telling the ingredients to employees.
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 but not the least, it is
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money-saving
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 process. Because they don't need to buy raw
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 from the market which will save five per cent of money according to the survey.
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, it
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 has drawbacks to
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 trend.
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, it is unhealthy
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 as compared to homemade
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. Because mostly convenience
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 outlets use frozen
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, which is unhealthy.
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, a survey conducted by a
pretigious
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prestigious
 newspaper showed that fifty per cent of fast
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 stores serve stored and can
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, which is harmful
for
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 health.
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, people face
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health-related
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health related
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health-related
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 problems like
overweight
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being overweight
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. Apart from
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, it is
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a waste
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 of money because we have to pay
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double the amount for
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food
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 as compared to homemade
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. To conclude,
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even though
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even though
 junk
food
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 has increased our lifestyle and helped
to
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us to
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 deal with busy life standards.
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,
i
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 think that it has more disadvantages rather than advantages.
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