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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driveless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driveless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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After many years later transports
such
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buses
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 will drive by themselves. It means there will be no need for drivers to transport people. I think the pros of
this
 development outweigh the cons. In
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 I will discuss the lowering of the cost
for
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 transport as well as risking the lives of passengers in possible
accidents
. On the one hand,
vehides
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vehicles
hides
 without drives will
less
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have
accidents
 on the roadway and even save the life of
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a passenger
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passenger
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.
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Implementation
Implenentation
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Implementation
 of
special
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 program about the traffic rules will decrease the number of
car
accidents
 Even if they happen, the
car
 would automatically take
safe
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measurement
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.
For example
, Elen Mask’s
car
 project Tesla is driverless and it can detect dangerous objects and save people.
On the other
hand
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 the cost of these machines will be much higher than usual ones. It means that not all people opportunity to afford them. For that reason,
the
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automatic cars may not
equally
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distribute
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 all over the world. In conclusion,
driverless
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vehicle
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 would be an innovation. The opportunities like
high security
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 level outweigh its high cost because it would reduce the level of
car
accidents
.
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, most
middle class
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middle-class
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 families which corers most of
world
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 would not have enough money to buy it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Autonomous vehicles
  • Human error
  • Optimize routes
  • Fuel efficiency
  • Mobility
  • Independence
  • Eco-friendly
  • Electric technologies
  • Job losses
  • Driving-related professions
  • Hacking
  • Safety and privacy
  • Significant investment
  • Ethical dilemmas
  • Unavoidable accident scenarios
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