In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

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year
is often an option that
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taken by
students
. Taking a
year
off from study comes with
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benefits
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benifits
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benefits
on
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having opportunities for individuals to develop new
skills
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discover their passions.
On the other hand
,
this
plan may disadvantage people if
time
is used unwisely, or if one feels getting delayed
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others. Discussing
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the main advantages, taking a
year
off is a great way to hone
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soft
skills
. During high school and university
years
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it is not always
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guaranteed
guranteed
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guaranteed
to have a place in the busy day to work on volunteering. But with
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year
, people can seriously take part in actions that would develop lifelong social
skills
.
Furthermore
, by having more
time
to
yourself
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, individuals can discover
its
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passion.
This
can be especially helpful for
students
that are planning to study in America, where courses in university can be changed after enrolling.
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way it benefits
students
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studies that are
alligned
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aligned
to their passion.
In contrast
, the
year
of self-discovery can be easily wasted if it is not planned constructively. Putting aside telephone calls for work experience, and
instead
binging on TV shows can easily consume up all the
time
for
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. Meanwhile, others may feel delayed from taking the
year
off. Especially with the recent accessibility to
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media
platform
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, people can easily compare themselves with others and may end up feeling like they are wasting
time
with the
year
.
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In fact
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In fact
,
such
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caused many
students
to feel
negatively
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about their gap
year
. In conclusion, taking a
year
off from study can create a chance to build interpersonal
skills
.
However
,
such
advantage should be
outweighted
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outweighed
by potential consequences
such
as
,
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ineffective
time
usage, or the negative impacts on mental health.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural immersion
  • Life experience
  • Work ethic
  • Career readiness
  • Self-discovery
  • Delayed gratification
  • Intellectual stagnation
  • Financial implications
  • Social dynamics
  • Academic trajectory
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