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Some people say that self employment is better than a job in a company or an institution. Discuss both modes of work and give your own opinion.

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People tend to believe that independent work is more beneficial than working for a
company
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.
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for
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 self-employment and working for a
company
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.
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, as far as I am
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, working for a
company
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 is necessary to acquire more experience in
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professional life.
Firstly
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, working for a
company
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 gives security in terms of earnings.
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, it is signed an agreement stating yearly salary which is the
business
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'
responsability
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responsibility
 of doing it.
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, it gives the chance of growing professionally. A prominent
company
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 usually offer a career development scheme.
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, Uber is the largest
company
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 worldwide with a professional development program.
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, being an employee
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 has benefits on security and professional development opportunities.
On the other hand
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, working independently offers more benefits on freedom of supervision and reporting to management.
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 self-employed person does not have any management of supervisors and the decision on what direction to go is the individual to take it.
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, it is no secret
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that
thar
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that
 freelances can work in their own peace and flexibility.
For example
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, a
business
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 owner can go and check the
business
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time
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 to time while staff are well-organised and prepared.
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, freelance has more freedom than those who work for a
business
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. To conclude, from the arguments discussed above, it is inconceivable to believe that only the self-employment option has positive points. Despite
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the fact of freelance
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work
wotrk
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work
 gives more flexibility and decision-freedom, a job at an institution can add more chances of job outcomes and the chance of
career
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a career
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 path.
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