IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 5.5

There are those who feel that modern technology has had an overall positive impact on lives, but others feel its existence has been more of a negative influence. Discuss both sides essay and give your own opinion

#technology #impact #lives #existence #influence
With the influence of
technology
 in our daily lives and the level of our dependency on modern devices, it is difficult to avoid
technology
 today. While some
people
 think that its existence has no positive
impact
 on the users of
technology
, I agree with those who believe that it has a valuable
impact
 on our lives. On the one hand, it could be argued that
people
 are so dependent on
technology
 these days that they spend almost most of their
time
 with any devices or using any gadgets and as a
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
result there is no physical activity done by these
people
 and
this
 leads to a great negative
impact
 on their physical health.
Moreover
,
,
Change the punctuation
apply
show examples
children these days are so getting used to it that they are not participating in any sports activities rather than they prefer playing games with their gadgets in their houses.
However
, I believe that modern
technology
Add a missing verb
is use
show examples
use
Wrong verb form
used
show examples
 in many aspects
like
Change preposition
apply
show examples
taking the example of mobile phones, we can communicate with anyone in just seconds by just dialling their number on our mobile phones. Moving
further
, with the help of modern
technology
 students can easily attend all the lectures online by using any online web portals.
For example
, in ,
pandamic
Correct your spelling
pandemic
 it was very hard for students to attend lectures in person by going to school and at that
time
 online classes were the only way to attend their classes.
However
, in my ,opinion it is most useful in
time
-saving as any work can be done quickly and sufficiently in less span of
time
. In conclusion,
although
 some
people
 may believe that we are completely dependent on
technology
, it
also
 helps us in saving our
time
.
Therefore
, on balance, I believe that modern
technology
 has led a positive
impact
 on our lives.
Submitted by mujahidmehdi1996 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: