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House

is

one

of

elementary

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needs of people. In my country, there are 3 basic needs for people, clothes,

foods

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, and

house

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/place for living. In my opinion, owning a

home

rather than renting

one

is important for

human

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.

First

, by owning a

home

, we can live

more

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peaceful life. We feel secure until we grow old

for

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years in the future. We have no worries

for

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being kicked out

from

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our

house

. Owning a

home

is

one

of

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a contributor

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contributor

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to our happy

live

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.

Second

, by owning a

home

, we can do anything to make our

house

becomes whatever we want. We can change the model, furniture, even

colour

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of our

house

. We don’t have to ask permission if we want to do something to our

house

.

Besides

that, owning a

house

means we have an investment for

future

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. The price of

house

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the house

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usually grows every year.

For example

, in Jakarta,

capital

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of Indonesia the price of

landed

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house

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becomes double every 5 years.

This

means having a

house

especially

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in Jakarta is

one

of the smartest investments. Having

house

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is

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also

means we know our neighbour deeply. People who live

their

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own

home

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homes

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usually know their surroundings better than those

only

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rent

home

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homes

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for

living

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. The atmosphere of

house

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also

becomes warmer.

On the other hand

, owning

home

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also

has unfavourable things. We have to

spent

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budget

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for

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maintaining

of

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our

home

. We have to pay

tax

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every year, and

also

some risks like natural

disaster

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disasters

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,

earthquake

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, or even

disaster

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disasters

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caused by

human

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.

Consider

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their positive and negative sides,

i

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conclude that owning a

home

still has more positive impacts

to

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our life. So, if we have

ability

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to have

house

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then

go to have it.