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The only way to improve road safety is to give much stricter punishments on driving offenses. To what extent do you agree or not?

#road #safety #punishments #offenses
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 a secure place for
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public
 who want to use these for transportation is a challengable situation for governments that they want to create the series of
laws
 which are
usefull
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useful
 for preventing accidents ,so ,some opine the
punishment
 is a good way to make
peolpe
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people
 would avoid from
braking
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breaking
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 the
laws
 of driving ,
however
, others have stated
awards
 are
also
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staying
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laws
,
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finally
, I would prefer to choose both for managing drivers that they
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 a lawful
persons
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 on the roads,for
this
 reason, I am going to
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bring
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 to explore pros and cons of these approaches. In a beginning , in
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2022,
UK
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 been studied
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the
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 of accidents that have
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happened due to passing from the standard speed in subways , in
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from
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this
 study many countries have repeated
this
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 their information and reached the same results that have stated the tight
laws
 are good
controling
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controlling
 factor for preventing from high-speed for cars ,
as a result
 ,it has seen a significant improvement on crush accidental events ,so,these countries that have
a tight
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laws
 are more successful in
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other
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hands
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, the system of
punishment
 is not the only way to manage
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society to
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 them behaving in
a
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proper on the streets ,
for example
 ,when the UK
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 been considered
awards
 for
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individuals
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 who have not a history of breaking
laws
 during their driving in a year ,suddenly ,the percentage of little driving crimes
such
 as parking in
a forbidden places
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forbidden places
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 or passing a red light has been
been
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dropped ,so, it is confirmed governments can be used from
awards
 to encourage their
citizents
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citizens
 that they are a lawful driver. To summarize,
policy makers
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 must consider a great
punishment
 for high-speeding to
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prevent
pevent
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prevent
from
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accidents
in
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 roads and give
awards
 for little deviation from normal driving behaviour
such
 as parking in unallowing places and
paasing
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passing
 from a red light ,
finally
 ,
punishment
 is not the only factor to encourage people to be a
lawfull
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lawful
 citizen.
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