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many processed food and ready-meals contain preservatives and chemicals. do you think that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages ?

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processed meal is available easily in the market. Most processed
food
 contains preservatives and
chemicals
 to increase the
life
 of foodstuff. I believe that there are more drawbacks
such
 as human health issues than advantages.
This
 essay will discuss my viewpoints in the forthcoming paragraphs.
To begin
 with, there are some drawbacks to consuming ready-made
meals
.
Firstly
, people who consumed packaged
meals
 are suffering from serious diseases
such
 as diabetes, high cholesterol, obesity and cancer. Because foods are preserved with
chemicals
 which are not good for our health.
For instance
, In china, 98% of packaged snack contains
chemicals
 to increase the
life
 of snacks and 80% of people are suffering from obesity and diabetes. Without
chemicals
 and ,preservatives
food
's
life
 is very short.
Moreover
, ready-
meals
 consist of lower nutrition values. They do not add vegetables or fruits to preserved
meals
.
Instead
 of ,fruits they added fruit flavour
chemicals
 to add taste to the
food
.
On the other hand
, some people consider ready-
meals
 as a blessing to the new generation. Now,
life
 has become busier and they do not have time to cook
Food
 at home so they prefer to eat preserved
food
.
For instance
, in India, mostly both parents are working and their children can cook Maggie easily. To illustrate, a survey found that 87% of Indians are Maggie consumers because they can cook
food
 instantly. To conclude, in my opinion, there is a lot of packaged
food
 available which creates health issues. I think that there are more drawbacks of readymade
meals
 than advantages
Submitted by Rajwinder Kaur on

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