Films and computer games which contain violence are very popular. Some people believe they have a negative effect on societies and so must be banned. Other people; however, say that they are just harmful and help people to relax. Discuss both these points of view and give your opinion.

Nowadays, videos and online
games
are getting popular in our societies.
However
, it has been a widespread argument that both of them should be prohibited because they led to destructive
impact
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. While
,
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others believe that it supports
the
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society to be chill since it is an unrealistic feature. In
this
essay, I will try to discuss both views and address my opinion. On the one hand, the negative sides of films
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from inappropriate scenes and the way
people
interpreted
it
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them
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.
Uncenssored
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Uncensored
image
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images
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may lead
people
to absorb and imitate a bad action in the wrong context.
For example
, the suicide's background can be followed by
people
with minimum supervision as they feel related to the storyline.
Besides
, the ideas behind the production
sometimes
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are sometimes
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transferred into the implicit lines. As a consequence, if
people
consider the story as a factual phenomenon, they will be
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misled
mislead
misleaded
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by the illusion.
On the other hand
,
violence
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violent
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actions may give
people
chance
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a chance
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to trait their
adrenalines
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adrenaline
and help them to enjoy their spare time. Many think of
games
and movies as only dimensional graphics which has no significant consequences.
For instance
,
people
assured that they have their own logic to process
which
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is right or wrong, they could not easily
to
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be trapped.
Furthermore
, watching a movie or playing a game can help
people
to release their stress.
As a result
, they will be more productive and get
work-life
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a work-life
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balance. To conclude, in a polarization opinion about films and video
games
, there must be a benefit and
drawback
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drawbacks
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. Even if many
people
think that TV series or
games
support
people
's mental health,
however
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I firmly believe that those give many negative impacts
such
as imitating to fight or
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misinterpretation
.
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