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Movies and television strongly influence the way people behave. Do you agree or disagree? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.

Most
people
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 agree that all forms of entertainment affect
society
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. In my opinion,
movies
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 and television shows really do
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 how
people
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 behave. I feel
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 way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
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 of all, films and television provide
society
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 with a lot of negative roles which many
people
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 are willing to emulate. These days, the so-called “anti-hero” is a big part of popular culture.
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 is a type of character who acts badly around other
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, ignores the rules of
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 and has a really misanthropic attitude. Commonly, these characters glorify excessive violence and drug use. My own personal experience is a compelling example of
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. When I was in high school, a close friend of mine was a huge fan of characters like
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. While he started high school as a straight-A student, he later began to watch a lot of films which gave him the impression that taking drugs and fighting with his classmates was amusing and even desirable manner.
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, he barely finished high school and is now unemployed.
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, he has few job prospects. Had he not watched so many terrible
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, he would not be in
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 a desperate situation today.
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, TV shows and
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also
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 provide
people
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 with a lot of positive role models. For
people
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 who desire to watch wholesome shows, there are many family-friendly options to choose from. Programs of
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 type showcase functioning and stable families. They don’t just show traditional and conservative families, but caring, loving
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 from many different backgrounds and with many different beliefs.
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, my own family often takes inspiration from the parents and children we see
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in our
show examples
favorite
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show examples
 family drama, “The
Bosby
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Cosby
 Show.” We are not always able to live up to the ideals the show presents to us, but they positively
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 the way we behave every day. We are really thankful for the
influence
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 it has on our lives. In conclusion, I am of the opinion that television and
movies
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influence
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 the way almost everyone behaves in modern
society
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.
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 is because some
movies
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 cause us to act in detrimental ways and because other shows inspire us to emulate and embrace positive values.

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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