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In many countries, plastic shopping bags are the main source of rubbish, causing pollution on land and in water, so they should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Plastic wastes from
industries
 are harmful to both plants and
animals
. Countries are of the opinion that rubber shopping bags should be prohibited as more negative effects are seen than
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positive ones. I strongly believe
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this
 notion, as it
bring
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 about both unhealthy plant and animal.
To begin
 with refuse from plastics which are channelled in oceans or land by
industries
 cause poor growth of farm crops. As sewages from industry can reduce the quality of
soil
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. Most factories channel their wastes to the ocean where farmers use the same ocean for irrigation, which
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 as a prevention of photosynthesis to take place as well as poor intake of essential nutrients by crops.
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, in Nigerian news
2003
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, a commercial farmer used
ocean
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 as a means of irrigation I.e. underground water, recorded low farm output due to methods of disposal of most companies. Regulation or recycling should be adopted.
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 of
animals
are affects
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 especially
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aquatic
animals
 and human territory. Refuse dumped in the stream
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reduces the
reducesthe
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reduces
 oxygen level in the water.
Also
, fumes produced by plastic
industries
 pollute the atmosphere or environment, which are toxic to man and damage
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 some organs can occur.
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, a man who works
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a
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 plastic chair industry was diagnosed recently of having lung disease.
Industries
 should be located out of human buildings and we'll equipment provided for employees. In conclusion, it has resulted
to
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negative
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 impact
for
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 society. I completely agree that polythene bags should be banned as it a threat to both plants and
animals
.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
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  • however
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  • even though
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