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Every generation of people is different in important ways. How is your generation different from your parent's generation? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer.

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As
time
 changes things going around
also
changes
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,
as a result
, we see many differences in our and in our
parent
's
generation
. There are a
lot
 of things which make many differences in one
generation
 and in the
next
generation
. In my opinion, I agree with the statement and I think the
use
 of the internet and the development of
transportation
 sources are the two main factors, which make a significant contrast between my
generation
 and my
parent
's
generation
, which I will explore in
this
 essay.
First
, as an initial point, I would like to say that nowadays the
facility
 of the Internet has changed so many things,
such
 as the
use
 of social media, online studies, smartphones, smartwatches and many more. During my
parent
's ,
generation
 there was no
such
facility
 and
therefore
 they have to spend a
lot
 of
time
 managing their routine work.
For example
, My parents used to tell me that to talk with their friends, who are living very far, they either have to write a letter to them or have to book a call for communication, which is very easy in the present scenario. Nowadays, I just have to do a message on phone or on my social account and instantly I get in touch with any of our friends, it doesn't matter where they are living.
Second
 is the development of
transportation
 sources. Today, we have various ways of
transportation
; either by bus, car, train, ship or aeroplane and their
facility
has
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 improved a
lot
 from my
parent
's
time
. Now for the shortest distance
also
 we have an aeroplane
facility
 or we can
use
 our own aircraft. But, at the
time
 of my ,parents everything was present; the bus, car, ship, train and aeroplane but their number and frequency was very less and
therefore
, for the shortest distance they have to
use
 either a bus or their own car. In conclusion, I believe that
,
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 the Internet and development in
transportation
 have changed a
lot
 of stuff nowadays, which was not present during my parents'
time
 period.
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