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nowadys many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization. what might this be the case. what could be the disadvantages of being self-empolyed.

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The trend pf self-employed has become prevailing now, it has some reasons behind
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, and my reasons will be explained in the following paragraphs.
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, it's easier to find a work-life balance. As we know, when we are self-employed, there is no fixed working time;
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, we decide the working hours by ourselves. According to some statistical figures, only 29% of self-employed workers work over 40 hours per week.
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, when you are self-employed, you have a more flexible schedule, and you can find the work-life balance easier.
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, more freedom. If you work in a traditional way, you need to drive to the workplace every day, follow your boss's commands, and live in a rut.
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, if you are self-employed, you decide the workplace; it can be your dwelling place or a decent office. It's commonplace that many people choose to work remotely, it's more relaxing, and the time for transportation can be saved.
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, self-employed has some demerits as well.
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, your job is not guaranteed. In a traditional way, no matter how terrible you are at your job, you can still get a basic salary.
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, if you are self-employed, you must try your best to find clients;
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, you can easily go bankrupt.
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, there are no extra bonuses. As we know, one advantage of working for others is that your employer will take care of your bonus and your future pension for you.
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, when you are self-employed, health insurance is more expensive than your boss provides. In conclusion, there are the two main reasons and disadvantages mentioned in the
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 paragraphs.
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