Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, bussiness and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

There are two preferences in sharing
information
about scientific research, business and scholars. Some
people
think that sharing
those
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information
broadly is a good
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think
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, while others believe that it is not appropriate to share them freely.
This
paper will elaborate
both
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opinions including my personal view about
this
issue. It is collectively believed that knowledge as a part of the
information
is really essential
on
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the growth of
human
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race.
Thus
, some
people
believe that
those knowledge
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must be shared as much as possible in order to build the community to become a better place.
However
, the
process
of obtaining
those
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information
is considered
as
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a complex
process
which needs a lot of costs
such
as money, time, energy, etc. To gain some valuable
information
, researchers might need to work really hard and perhaps sacrifice their personal life as well as those who work in
business
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the business
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field that has to allocate a huge amount of budget
in
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research and development in order to improve their company. According to that reason, it is reasonable that some
people
do not think that sharing
information
freely is a good idea. Even though the
process
of gaining
information
is invaluable, I believe that it is still important to share,
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especially
espescially
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especially
for those who really need it but do not have sufficient access. To take developing
countries
as
example
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, I believe that
people
in
this
country really need
those knowledge
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to improve the quality of their life in many aspects
such
as health, education, economy, safety, etc. Those
countries
might not have enough sources to do the research due to the lack of budgeting, expertise and equipment.
Therefore
, if developed
countries
are eager to give access
of
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information
without any costs, it would really benefit those developing
countries
. In conclusion,
information
is really essential for
human’s
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development. It is true that the
process
of gaining
those
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information
might need a lot of costs.
However
, it is important to provide unlimited access
of
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those in order to make the world become a better place to live.
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