Shops should not be allowed to sell any food or drinks that have been scientifically proven to be bad for people’s health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that unhealthy
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and drinks
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damage
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’s health should be banned. From my perspective, I partly agree with
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statement and the following essay will discuss both pros and cons. There are some reasons to explain why shops are allowed to sell unhealthy
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and drinks.
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with, choosing which kind of diet is a basic human right, so
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can select any
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that they want to consume independently as long as they do not affect others.
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, it is unrealistic to prohibit all bad
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to be sold to the customers since there are considerable products
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chemically modified.
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, if all the chemical products are abandoned, it might lead to the consequence that
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are
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food
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.
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,
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it is not good to limit
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’s rights, I believe that the government can control the amount of junk
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and drinks
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consumed
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by the public. By decreasing the consumption of
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an unhealthy
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diet
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, it might significantly enhance the health of
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.
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, if customers can only buy fast
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4 times a month,
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can keep fit and look for healthier products.
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, partly inhibiting
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to purchase junk
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allows them to save money because of lowering the expenditure on unhealthy goods. In conclusion,
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people
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are allowed to select
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whatever they want, I think that it is better to limit it
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some degree because
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become not only healthier but
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richer.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Regulations
  • accountability
  • retailers
  • public health
  • consumer choice
  • diet
  • banning
  • health education
  • awareness campaigns
  • economic impact
  • job losses
  • small businesses
  • complexity
  • beneficial
  • harmful
  • quantity consumed
  • individual health conditions
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