Although it is generally illegal, physical punishment continues in many countries. Some argue that parents should have the right to punish their children in this way. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that in some areas, physical
punishment
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still exists despite it being abandoned in
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of countries because some people argue that physical
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is one of their legitimacy to guide their offspring. From my perspective, I strongly disagree with the statement and the following essay will illustrate the reasons for my view. There are several factors to explain why I have an opposite opinion about corporal
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with, punishing
children
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in
this
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way extremely affects
children
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’s mental health.
Although
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it seems that the
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is
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, it might lead to the consequence of
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living
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a
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lifestyle.
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, it is easy for kids to accumulate a significant amount of pressure in their
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but they do not know how to release them.
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, parents usually perform as the younger generation’s role models. If
children
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have suffered severe corporal
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from their father or mother, it has a tendency that they would behave the same to
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generation.
As a result
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, a vicious circle occurs. In terms of the validity of physical
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, much research has shown that it is not an efficient approach to correct teenagers’
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. While
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do not comprehensively understand why they are punished, they frequently commit the same
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By contrast
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, if parents could teach
children
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by heart
instead
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of with a stick, the younger generation would have more opportunities to release and distinguish what is right and wrong.
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, my parents always explained the reason to me and educated me when I was a child.
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, I can fully understand why I did wrong and prevent myself
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form
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doing it again. In conclusion, I disagree with physical
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because it considerably influences
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’s mental health and it is not
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.
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