Although it is generally illegal, physical punishment continues in many countries. Some argue that parents should have the right to punish their children in this way. Do you agree or disagree?

It is true that in some areas, physical
punishment
still exists despite it being abandoned in
majority
Add an article
the majority
a majority
show examples
of countries because some people argue that physical
punishment
is one of their legitimacy to guide their offspring. From my perspective, I strongly disagree with the statement and the following essay will illustrate the reasons for my view. There are several factors to explain why I have an opposite opinion about corporal
punishment
.
To begin
with, punishing
children
in
this
way extremely affects
children
’s mental health.
Although
it seems that the
punishment
is
physically
Replace the adverb
physical
show examples
, it might lead to the consequence of
children
living
in
Change preposition
apply
show examples
a
tension
Replace the word
tense
show examples
lifestyle.
Therefore
, it is easy for kids to accumulate a significant amount of pressure in their
mind
Fix the agreement mistake
minds
show examples
but they do not know how to release them.
In addition
, parents usually perform as the younger generation’s role models. If
children
have suffered severe corporal
punishment
from their father or mother, it has a tendency that they would behave the same to
their
Change the word
the
show examples
next
generation.
As a result
, a vicious circle occurs. In terms of the validity of physical
punishment
, much research has shown that it is not an efficient approach to correct teenagers’
behaviors
Change the spelling
behaviours
show examples
. While
children
do not comprehensively understand why they are punished, they frequently commit the same
behaviors
Change the spelling
behaviours
show examples
.
By contrast
, if parents could teach
children
by heart
instead
of with a stick, the younger generation would have more opportunities to release and distinguish what is right and wrong.
For example
, my parents always explained the reason to me and educated me when I was a child.
Hence
, I can fully understand why I did wrong and prevent myself
Correct your spelling
from
show examples
form
Correct your spelling
from
show examples
doing it again. In conclusion, I disagree with physical
punishment
because it considerably influences
children
’s mental health and it is not
validity
Replace the word
valid
show examples
.
Submitted by wanchu.nien on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Ultimate Speaking practice for IELTS

Practice speaking step by step, answer real-life questions, and build your confidence. Start your free trial and improve your speaking skills today!
What to do next:
Look at other essays:

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!