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Some people believe that it is wrong to keep animals in zoo while others think that zoo are both entertainment and fun, discuss both the views and give Ur opinions.

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The maps below illustrate the changes in a university’s
sports
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 centre at the moment and after its reconstruction. Having a glance at the present layout, we could easily recognize that the middle part, which includes the gym, seating, changing
room
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, and 25m pool will not be changed
afterward
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.
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 of the outdoor courts located on the
West
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 and East side, the future plans will eliminate them and place totally different types of facilities. After the redevelopment, in the
West
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,
this
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 place is going to build a leisure pool, which is linked with the changing
room
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 in the South
West
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.
Furthermore
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, the
sports
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 shop will be placed near the changing
room
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 of the pool.
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, the East side provides the
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 hall and two dance studios. As the same in the
West
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, there will be a changing
room
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 served for the
sports
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 hall and a café
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 to it. Overall, the reconstruction of the university
sports
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 centre obviously brings a wide range selection for any
sports
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 lovers or students to experience and enhance their physical health.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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