Some people think that we should divide students based on their academic ability, while others think we should educate all students together. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, there are
people
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who consider academic ability to be
an important criteria
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for dividing
students
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in terms of their education programmes and others who think that all
students
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should be educated together. I am an advocate of the importance of making
differences
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between
students
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regarding their
abilities
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and the essay will explain both points of view and give examples.
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Firstly
, the
differences
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between humans are the ones that
makes
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each of us unique in our own way.
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This
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differences
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are seen mostly in our
appereances
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appearances
appearance
but
also
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in our native or gained
abilities
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in the process of learning. Educating
students
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differently based on their unique powers will raise
wll
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will
well
all
-prepared
people
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for different work fields.
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, a good differentiation between youngsters gives them self-confidence and power to
aknowledge
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acknowledge
their own
caracteristics
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characteristics
, to work on their skills and prepare for a job that they are good at. For
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,
students
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who have charismatic skills and the ability to speak in public will have
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successful
successfully
succesfull
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successful
jobs in management, teaching and politics.
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, preparing them in
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this
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areas would give
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possibility to follow a dream carrier.
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, raising the
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awareness
awarness
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awareness
of
students
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concerning their
abilities
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should lower
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long
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term, the number of unemployed young
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who do not know what job suites them well.
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, making
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between
students
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could affect their self-esteem and have a huge negative impact on their professional course. Youngsters with less academic
abilities
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will probably try harder or even leave school. Those drawbacks will affect
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students
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students'
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academic
acadmic
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academic
, personal and working life.
For instance
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,
students
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with low self-esteem could see the
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not
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like
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a chance to compete with themselves but
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desolation. To sum up, I believe that we should always see the good in
people
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and an academic ability
differention
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differentiation
differential
among
students
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would have more positive effects than drawbacks.
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